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Overwhelmed | Chapter 7 | Curiosity
Title: Overwhelmed: Chapter 7: Curiosity
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starzki
Rating: MA
Genre: Romance
Word Count: 1952
Summary: Kaname and Sousuke finally have all the time they need to come together and explore their feelings for one another. Spoilers for the series. Post Always Stand by Me, Part 2. Chapter 7: Curiosity: Kaname turns the tables on Sousuke.
LINK: ff.net
NOTES:
Welp, I've been flirting with writing this story for weeks now. I get a little embarrassed with the idea that I purposely set out to write a chapter about oral sex, so I kind of procrastinated writing it. With the hectic time around the holiday (plus I was out of town the week before), I didn't have a lot of writing time, anyway.
Unlike the previous chapters, I didn't have an exact map of where I wanted the characters to go, how they would feel, or what they would do. I had some images, but nothing as concrete as the previous six chapters in this story. Basically, I just let Kaname go at it, and this chapter was the result. It flowed incredibly well once I sat down and started writing it. I'm pretty happy with it.
The only problems I had with this chapter are problems I have whenever I write any kind of lemon. It comes down to vocabulary when discussing sexual organs. I hate most of the words usually used to describe them, especially for women. "Pussy" and "cunt" are right out. I hate those words with a passion. "Vagina" is too technical and incredibly unsexy. That leaves me with euphemisms which I kind of hate, too. "Womanhood" is a no, anything that references flowers is out. That leaves me with "center," "heat," "sex," and maybe some other descriptors that reference the area in question. I hate all the options, so I just went with what I considered the least offensive and what would kind of work for their situations.
As for naming the male part, it's a little easier. I can go with "cock." That's pretty much it, and if you've read this chapter, I used it liberally. I hate "manhood." Just no. And "dick" is a word I often use as an insult to other people, so I'd hate to call any part of Sousuke that. :) The others I'm not big fans of either, for similar reasons.
I hope that people like this chapter as it's probably a good lead in to the grand finale. Like this chapter, I have ideas, but I'm just going to see where Sousuke and Kaname take the scenario in the bedroom next. I hope to have it out before the new year.
Author:
starzki Rating: MA
Genre: Romance
Word Count: 1952
Summary: Kaname and Sousuke finally have all the time they need to come together and explore their feelings for one another. Spoilers for the series. Post Always Stand by Me, Part 2. Chapter 7: Curiosity: Kaname turns the tables on Sousuke.
LINK: ff.net
NOTES:
Welp, I've been flirting with writing this story for weeks now. I get a little embarrassed with the idea that I purposely set out to write a chapter about oral sex, so I kind of procrastinated writing it. With the hectic time around the holiday (plus I was out of town the week before), I didn't have a lot of writing time, anyway.
Unlike the previous chapters, I didn't have an exact map of where I wanted the characters to go, how they would feel, or what they would do. I had some images, but nothing as concrete as the previous six chapters in this story. Basically, I just let Kaname go at it, and this chapter was the result. It flowed incredibly well once I sat down and started writing it. I'm pretty happy with it.
The only problems I had with this chapter are problems I have whenever I write any kind of lemon. It comes down to vocabulary when discussing sexual organs. I hate most of the words usually used to describe them, especially for women. "Pussy" and "cunt" are right out. I hate those words with a passion. "Vagina" is too technical and incredibly unsexy. That leaves me with euphemisms which I kind of hate, too. "Womanhood" is a no, anything that references flowers is out. That leaves me with "center," "heat," "sex," and maybe some other descriptors that reference the area in question. I hate all the options, so I just went with what I considered the least offensive and what would kind of work for their situations.
As for naming the male part, it's a little easier. I can go with "cock." That's pretty much it, and if you've read this chapter, I used it liberally. I hate "manhood." Just no. And "dick" is a word I often use as an insult to other people, so I'd hate to call any part of Sousuke that. :) The others I'm not big fans of either, for similar reasons.
I hope that people like this chapter as it's probably a good lead in to the grand finale. Like this chapter, I have ideas, but I'm just going to see where Sousuke and Kaname take the scenario in the bedroom next. I hope to have it out before the new year.
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I chicken out more than you when it comes to the euphemisms - I try to stay away from purple prose, but tend to get really, really vague, too. I'm all about context clues, LOL. IDK, it helps that I've read a ton of (good!) sex scenes in romance novels, so I kinda have a roadmap to follow...
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My own road map for good sex scenes is... FANFIC! I know, I know. But there is some really great smut out there and I'm lucky to stumble across it every now and then.
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I tend to read witty romance novels, and said authors tend to stay away from the purple prose. Of course, I have read some of the old classics (Victoria Holt, anyone? Beatrice Small for the true lolz) and I share your aversion to "manhood" - tho I raise you one better in "manroot."
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And manroot? Wow. Better than generative jockey, though.
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"generative jockey"? What the hell does that even mean, LOL?!?!
Seriously, pick up a Beatrice Small book one day from the library or something - you'll laugh yourself sick, LOL!!
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Oh, the jockey comment was one from the bad porn awards (something like his generative jockey rode in her pelvic saddle...). *shudder*
I have heard that there are good romances out there. Someday I will check them out!
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"He began thrusting wildly in the general direction of her chrysanthemum, but missing" (Rare Earth by Paul Mason)
I mean, its one thing to go with a flowery euphemism, but this is just sad, LOL. (Plus there's the whole context of maybe this wasn't the flowery bloom of her womanhood that he was aiming for...)